1. Original Text
The time you won your town the race
We chaired you through the market-place;
Man and boy stood cheering by,
And home we brought you shoulder-high.
To-day, the road all runners come,
Shoulder-high we bring you home,
And set you at your threshold down,
Townsman of a stiller town.
Smart lad, to slip betimes away
From fields where glory does not stay,
And early though the laurel grows
It withers quicker than the rose.
Eyes the shady night has shut
Cannot see the record cut,
And silence sounds no worse than cheers
After earth has stopped the ears:
Now you will not swell the rout
Of lads that wore their honours out,
Runners whom renown outran
And the name died before the man.
So set, before its echoes fade,
The fleet foot on the sill of shade,
And hold to the low lintel up
The still-defended challenge-cup.
And round that early-laurelled head
Will flock to gaze the strengthless dead,
And find unwithered on its curls
The garland briefer than a girl's.
2. Initial Reaction
A. E. Housman’s “To an Athlete Dying Young” is so profoundly praising the thought of dying young. The narrator seems to think that because the runner was able to die at a young age, he was able to skip the sad reality that would hit him when other runners began to be his times and cast a shadow on his legacy. The poem is about the virtues of dying young and that the longer people tend to live, the more disappointed you will get.
3. Paraphrase
That time you won the race for your town
We carried you around the town square;
Boys and men stood around cheering,
And we brought you home on our shoulders.
Today, the path all runners must run,
Shoulder-high we brought you home,
A place you at your resting place,
Townspeople of a quieter town.
Smart boy, to slip too early away
From life where fame doesn’t stay,
And even though fame and victory came during a young age
It disappears faster than a rose.
The dark night has shut your eyes
Can’t see how you got beat by another runner,
And quiet sounds no worse than claps
After death has stopped your hearing:
Now you will not puff up the disorder
Of lads that wore their pride out,
Runners whom lost their fame
And their victories died before they did.
So die, before its sound fades,
The running foot on the edge of darkness,
And hold to the low rafter up
The still-yours winner’s cup.
And around that you victor head
Will come together to gaze at the weak dead,
And find fresh on its locks
The swag shorter than a girl’s.
4. SWIFTT
SW = Syntax/Word Choice
The poem has 7 stanzas with 4 lines each. Each line has 8 syllables. The rhyme scheme is in AA BB format, which produces a then and now feeling. Because of the 8 syllables a line, the poem gives a pace much like the footsteps of a runner. The sentences are of simple structure and give their meaning willingly. Some of Housman’s words have some symbolic meaning. His use of race can relate to the general idea of accomplishing something. There isn’t any tricky word play in the poem.
I = Imagery
Housman calmly and naturally gives the setting for the funeral and what occurs. The way he describes what is happening allows readers to image themselves at the funeral seeing the casket being carried to the grave. When the narrator describes the laurels and the challenge-cup, it seems very easy to image a runner in all his pride and honor standing on a first place podium.
F = Figurative Language
Housman uses some figurative language in his poem. The first example of it is his large metaphor for victory and achieving something that you’ve always wanted to do in life. The race that he talks about could be referring to a man’s crowning achievement in life that in time may be forgotten just like a runner may be forgotten by the town he ran for. Housman also uses personification in the lines “Eyes the shady night has shut” and “After earth has stopped the ears.” He also uses apostrophe in the opening stanza by making the narrator talking directly to the deceased runner.
T = Tone
The tone of the poem is that of admiration and maybe just a little envy. The narrator ironically praises the dead runner for dying before he lost his fame. He feels that the runner got lucky by dying before the laurels withered. The poem’s tone obviously contains respect and glorification of a runner who was famous for his entire life instead of living to see his flame die.
T = Theme
The theme of Housman’s poem is that of the short life of fame. One should live their life to the fullest and try to accomplish as much as they can in as short of period as possible because you never know when death will strike. The narrator warns that a long life could be degrading because you could lose the fame that you once enjoyed in youth.
5. Conclusion
My initial reaction was partly correct in the sense that the poem is about how dying early could give you the pleasure of never having to witness the decline of your fame. Housman is trying to show the embodiment of what all people want in life: to leave a mark and forever be in memory. The narrator warns that the only way to be famous and remembered is to die before people forget about you. Housman is saying that the longer someone lives, the more disappointment and sadness that will accumulate.